Mikota {DENIED}

[mikota]

Name: Mikota Chiyoka

Age: 17

Gender: Female

Sexual Orientation: Straight

Occupation/Affiliation: Mikota is a trainer and has not of yet decided which side to join.

Party: vicious-circle.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=pokemonpc&thread=1952&page=1
Supplies: 5 pokeballs

Appearance: Mikota has long black hair that reaches the middle of her back. Her eyes are a dark brown. She usually wears dresses, skirts or blouses. Her favorite colors are green and white, blue and maroon or black and white.
Face Claim: Inuyasha - Kagome

Personality: Mikota is very friendly. There is always a smile on her face. She rarely ever gets angry or upset. And when she does she doesn't show it. She'll grab a pen and some paper and write. She'll use her love of writing poems and songs to get her anger out.
Other: The Pokemon she started with was Nala

Family: Yukio {Mother}, William {Father/Deceased}, Sara {Older Sister}
History:Mikota was born near Yukishiro Castle. In fact her mother worked for Akira as a maid and servant. Her father was killed when she was just a baby so she has no memory of her father. Her sister Sara who was two years old when her father was killed doesn't even remember him well. While her mother worked in the castle Mikota and Sara would often spend there day in the castle being watched by one servant or another. They grew up having all the servant's as a family. Even Akira took her turn watching over her and her sister. As she grew up she fell in love with the Pokemon that worked in the castle and tried to learn everything she could about them. When she was twelve her mother gave her a Pokemon egg. She took care of it and never let it out of her sight. When the egg hatched it became a Zorua which she named Nala. Her sister had already left on her journey so when Nala was born she left for her journey.

RP Sample

Mikota sat on the stump of an old pine tree. Her eyes
closed and her arms and legs where crossed. She was
in her human form. Her black tail twitched every now
and than, and on the rare occasion her wolf like ear's
might twitch. She was wearing all black from her boots
to her shirt. Her shirt had a hood on it but for the time
the hood was off. Many who saw her might think Mikota
was sleeping. But she was far from asleep. She was in
fact tracking a rabbit with her sense of hearing trying to
train her hearing so that with the slightest sound she
could find it and know what it was.

As she fallowed the sound of the rabbit as it dug at the
ground for something and ate it than ran under it's burrow
another sound came from behind her. The crack of a twig
did not go unnoticed. She did not move in the slightest but
was already searching for the thing that made the noise. It
was something big. To heavy for a human but to light to be
a bear. Mikota quickly figured that it must be another Legion
or a Beschützer. As it grew closer she still didn't move. But
when it was only a few feet behind her she smiled. "I know
your there what do you want? I am doing nothing but
meditating right now. Now leave me be or you will wish you
had." There had bean a snarl in her voice with the last
sentence for she had begun to transform into her in between
stage where she looked like a human and a wolf mixed together.

[Puppet]

Birijion is considered a legendary in the BW games, and thus is not available as a starting choice. You may also start with up to three pokemon, if you wish.

Need at least two paragraphs for the history, and a bit more for appearance. Look at some of the accepted characters if you need ideas.

[Admiral Striker General]

Also, please specify the Zorua is Shiny. I mean, we see that by the sprite, but still. Heh. x3

I'd like to add onto Puppet's critique and ask you to add at least a few more lines to the personality as well. You say it's very difficult to make her sad or angry; what can, then? While she may be very friendly, does that mean for everyone? Or are there certain types of people she does dislike? (Trainers who abuse their Pokemon, people who use others, liars, etc?) If so, how does she act to those she doesn't like? Or is she actually friendly to a fault, continuing to try to believe there's good in everyone no matter what they do? :3 Either way, specify~ Are there any things she extremely enjoys other than poetry, or certain things she's just fascinated by? Anything she absolutely can't stand? Adding a few of her most major likes and dislikes like this can add a good deal of body. ^__^ Just a few little prompts to help you flesh it out.


To help with history:

First, some things need to be fixed. Akira, assuming you do in fact mean the same one, is a guy, to start. Past that, he's only 19 himself, meaning he like Mikota's sister was only two years old when Mikota was born, meaning the family wouldn't have been serving him nor would he have been old enough to watch her. Having her family as servants of "the Naozumi family" in general would be a better alternative, although if you want to be specific you could use Akira's father's name, Cross, as well.

Finally, have you discussed the relationship between Akira and Mikota with Ryuujin? If not, you'll need to before this can be approved. I'd think being servants in that castle could still be acceptable either way, but she wouldn't have been able to ever more than have seen Akira in vague passing or a quick 'may I get you some more tea?'-type things at most unless Ryuu approves.

Moving on~ As to general help fleshing out, this should be easy enough. :3 She's been on her Pokemon journey for 4-5 years or so, yes? What's happened to her since she left? Was it hard when she started out at such a young age? How did she obtain the other Pokemon she owns (once you decide what you want instead of a Birijion of course)? Was it/were they just caught, bought, gifts, things she helped out who then followed her, rescued perhaps? :3 As you can have one Pokemon which is evolved, if you decide to take one maybe explain how it evolved (unless caught in that stage of course ^^).

Prompts are good~<3

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o3o' As a quick note, we do accept RP samples from other settings, so yours is fine and all. But just to be sure, it is from another setting and she doesn't have a non-human form on VC, right? x3

[mikota]

you know what I don't need this stupid site things are way to strict for my liking. I'll make sure to tell my friends not to come here as well.

[Admiral Striker General]

...All right? '^^; We don't really need members who can't follow our rules and think it's fair to force other members to do things if they don't want to either. Sorry things didn't work out; hope you find somewhere more to your taste.